The MBA GANG : Chapter Two
This fiction has been removed except for a brief chapter preview. oz is in talks with various parties for publishing his work and hence The MBA GANG and The Sex Addict have been taken down.
Chapter Two : Building a Rocking Team
The morning sea winds made a weird sound while rushing through the cracks of the sliding glass windows of Neha’s Worli Seaface apartment. MK always found the sound disconcerting. Today however, he barely heard the horror film like background sounds of the wind. His mind was laser focused on two issues at hand. One: Talking to Neha about joining him in the heist. Two: Making adrak tea for Neha’s hangover.
Neha had folded herself at the far corner of her living room sofa. A hot water tube sat on her head while she was popping in one pill after another to fight her headaches.
“So… who is this J…? I haven’t heard about him ever before from you” Neha was going through the sheets of the paper which had J’s plan on it.
“I will… for now J wants to be kept anonymous” MK had to up his volume so he could be heard from the kitchen.
MK brought two cups of tea into the living room.
“I need you on this Neha… this could be it. This could be what destiny is offering us - the path to our fantasy. Of living far away in peace and pursuing our passions of travel, beach, house, restaurants and whatever else we talk of…”
Neha dropped the paper on the center table and took the cup from MK.
“MK this is too crazy. I understand when life shells out tough times one may tend to do something out of the ordinary… but this…”
Neha’s cell phone rang.
“Yeah I’m not feeling well. Cancel my appointments for the day. And Raj, let my idiot boss know about it please…. Thanks.”
April 17th, 2006 at 10:37 am
oz dude ^:)^
being quite good at visualizing things, I actually have visuals of locations and characters forming in my head, thanks to the brilliant descriptions!
If I had enough bank balance, I would have already started a movie project with you as my storywriter.
~Manoj~
April 17th, 2006 at 11:07 am
Interesting.. kinda reminds me of Ocean’s Eleven. Waiting for the BIG meeting og the gang.
April 17th, 2006 at 2:00 pm
one semi dark arena filled with people - focused in the center is a tiny light slowly turning bright - it’s dias - there’s someone dressed in black stepping into the visual frame - It’s…. OZ, the story teller - the visuals slowly move/pan around the dias - slowmotion shower of kudos falling on Oz - clap! Clap! CLAP! - the sound of a thousand hearts resonating together with admiration - the sound and visuals are slowly gaining momemtum - zoom.. zoom.. zoom.zoom - round.. round..round.. clap! Clap! CLAP!
Baaki ka scenario baadme.
April 17th, 2006 at 6:56 pm
- Manoj, :(( - yeh khusi ke aansoon hain. Thanks!
- Pavan, haven’t started writing the third chapter yet. I did not know that writing each chapter could be so draining.
- WB, As the crowd settles down oz removes mask to reveal true self : :(|)
April 17th, 2006 at 10:44 pm
Oz, you have truly mastered the art of story telling here… You have left so many unanswered questions in my mind…
Will MK and Neha yield to the sexual tension building up between them?
Will Atanu’s wife be molested by the goons?
Will Sumanth finally get laid?
Will there be an item number?
April 18th, 2006 at 6:36 am
dude that was great.
can’t wait for next chapter.
you should contact RGV or KJ
April 18th, 2006 at 7:19 am
another =d> worthy chapter from Oz. Good job.
April 18th, 2006 at 7:46 am
Awesome stuff dude. When is it going to come out on DVD :-)
April 18th, 2006 at 10:55 am
Arun, wait a lil longer.. the torrent should be up anytime :d
oz, yes, I can understand how draining it is. Some f/b:
1) good that you have your characters from diff states: gult, bongolee, UP etc. They bring more originality.
2) Neha is getting lotsa attention from the viewers (ahem including me). Some info on her (or some flashback might not hurt). She defi is interesting, I tell ya. Are you reading this Neha? :d
3) The description of location is nice, esp the Oberoi bar scene in Mumbai. I would appreciate more like that (makes visualization and flow easier).
ciao.
April 18th, 2006 at 7:51 pm
- Nirav, Driving the story to have it answer your questions will soon turn me into a Sanjay Gupta Part II #:-s
- AJC, Thanks. Ha! I’m sure if I stand in the line outside their office my turn would come in by 2050
- N, Thank you buddy.
- Pavan, Damn…. why did you have to reveal the torrent thingy. Now I won’t be able to sell my movie :(( Thanks for the inputs. About Neha, I can see how many are getting interested in her. From the 20 odd emails received asking if I “really” know her and whether she is “still” “single”. That leads me to make an announcement:
“Neha” is “based” on someone I know in real life. And no her name in reality is not Neha. She lives in San Diego and yes she is as “spicy” as Neha is coming out to be in this fiction. Yes she is still single and no I’m not her match maker. So please stop sending me emails asking about her telephone/fax/email/pager and whatever you’ve been asking me about her %-(
April 18th, 2006 at 8:00 pm
Oz,
Wow…gripping…I better be careful with my commenting :))
:-w for the next part!
vi
P.S. Does Atanu get back at the goons???
April 19th, 2006 at 1:51 am
Ozzie’s sentence of cages….
…stop sending me emails asking about her telephone/fax/email/pager and whatever you’ve been asking me about her..
WB finds it loathsome and then some. x(
P.S: Mayhem Introduce Myself >:)
April 19th, 2006 at 7:11 am
Fast, short, on the edge and spicy
What else do you need from a thriller?
A perfect Heist movie! I think you should talk to someone from Hollywood. The first crossover heist movie.
Punds
April 21st, 2006 at 10:33 am
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April 29th, 2006 at 1:54 pm
My God Oz!!
U just outdo yourself everytime….Just when I think I knd of understand ur wriing…u spring a surprise…
way to go buddy!!!
June 16th, 2006 at 5:23 am
Oz sirjee,
I am getting more and more involved with your characters, and I must say you have a fabulous technique of characterization. I am floored.
jai ho!!! jai ho!! sirjee ki jai ho!!!
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